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Some people believe that social media sites, such as Facebook or Twitter, have a negative impact on young people and their ability to form personal relationships. Others believe that these sites bring people together in a beneficial way.

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These days technologies have developed to that level where
people
 can easily communicate from different places around the planet. Some
people
 think that relationships built-in social
media
 negatively affect youngsters and make relationships in real
life
. While opponents of
this
 opinion reckon that it is an easier and more beneficial
way
 to build relations. In my point of view, social
media
 badly affects young
people
, than benefits. On the one hand, some
people
 believe that youngsters who communicate with others on social
media
 lose their ability to speak with different
people
 in the traditional
way
.
Moreover
, being able to meet and speak is key in real
life
therefore
 if these abilities are not developed their success will be not realised. It will be hard to build relationships even more in adult
life
 to climb the career ladder.
On the other hand
, others think that social
media
 allow us to communicate with many
people
 from different places and backgrounds.
Furthermore
, usually, some youngsters cannot socialize with their peers because they are not confident.
For instance
, I had a friend who was afraid to make new friendships in the traditional
way
, so she preferred having online friends over real ones. To conclude, in my opinion, social
media
 is a great
way
 to bring
people
 together
however
, it negatively affects real
life
.
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