Some people think that environmental problems should be solvedon a global scale while others believe that it is better to deal with them nationally. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Certain groups of people suppose that our environmental scuffles should be tackled by a worldwide criterion. Whereas, some other groups intend to manage
this
issue through their own nations. From where I stand the
first
group has a point due to the reasons which will be discussed in the following paragraphs. The
first
group follows the idea of preserving our dear planet as one continent. The earth had been composed of one land and
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its surrounding oceans, primarily. Following
this
, through multiple phenomena, it was divided
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several continents which were mostly separated by oceans and seas. They believe that we should not struggle with political and geographical boundaries, and should presume it like its original form. Changing
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climates and
consequently
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global warming should be our
first
concern. Not only
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global warming affect folks, but
also
it is supposed to have a great serious impact on countries’
plants
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coverage and their animal
survivals
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. So, we indirectly ruin our nutritional resources.
Besides
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, various kinds of
pollutions
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pollution
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have been made by humans including air pollution and oceans contaminations,
are
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immediately spread throughout the world and might cause drastic illnesses.
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, it is
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widespread throughout underdeveloped countries that their main principle is to convince their people by providing different educational items to maintain the environment as their own residences and not to
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forced to pay massively for compensations.
Furthermore
, they are more focused on being progressed in industries and
as a result
, they neglect
producing
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enormous sorts of
pollutions
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. In my point of view, it is better to contemplate the whole
societies’
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sake and not to think individually; since our lives
are depend
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on global collaborations. To sum up,
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some people consider environmental issues’ solutions globally,
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other
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would approach it as individual nations.
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