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insome countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people.

In
this
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 contemporary world,there are lots of things which make
people
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's minds occupied. One of them is accommodation.It is believed that buying a home for their own is far more vital rather than renting them.In
this
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 essay,I will give the reasons for
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 happening and draw some conclusions. One of the major real plus points of owning a home is the fact that your stress might be reduced because of several reasons.
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,when you rent a
house
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,you should take care of it. Sometimes children may do some damage to the
house
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,but these worries would not exist if you bought your own home.One more thing that makes you worried is that you sometimes have to move,so
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 work may have some extra costs for you,
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 it needs a lot of physical work,
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 packing the staff.Thereby, the aforementioned reasons produce a high level of stress.
On the other hand
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, banks allocate some budget to aid folk to buy a
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 readily.
People
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 prefer to use the mortgage and buy their own favourite place.
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,buying a
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 becomes an affordable issue for poor
people
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.
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,some worrying issues about a
house
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 would not be continued.Family can have an enjoyable time with each other. In conclusion,buying your own apartment is so beneficial,because folk feel a sense of security in their places, and the level of welfare would be increased in society.Personally,I'm a curious person,and I think
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 buying a
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 is a good idea, I would like to change my place every year to find out a new location,new types of
people
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 and etc.

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