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During his studies, the applicant proved to be an active student. He was the administrator of his group's social media chat rooms. He was
also
 in charge of the group e-mail, so he received and managed all important information from the lecturers/administration and sent it to his
groupmates
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. He
also
 tried to keep track of deadlines for the group when it came to homework and exams.
In addition
, during his stay in the university
dormitory
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 he was a floor administrator. And
also
 participated in all the voluntary work to maintain the welfare of the dormitory (cleaning, repair work, landscaping).
Finally
, it was an additional plus that he was involved in creating student events and activities.
For example
, he prepared the tasks for the university quest. He
also
 helped to organise and participated in the camping event in the forest. And he participated in a comedy show, where students of different
specialties
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 of the university competed.
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