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Look at these two maps of a place called Felixstone.

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The map demonstrates how a place called
Felixstone
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Felixstowe
has
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developed from 1967 to 2001. Overall, there have been several changes, the most noticeable
farmland
 being replaced with
sports
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a sports
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 activity area, the elimination of
Marina
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the Marina
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 pier, and the introduction of a private beach. In 1967, shops and
high
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a high
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street
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streets
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located
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 between
golf
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the golf
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 course and
farmland
 upper
side
 of
Felixstone
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Felixstowe
. On the other
side
 of the place running by the sea stood a hotel with
cafe
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 beside dunes,
main
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the main
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 area is occupied by
Marina
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the Marina
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 pier.
Fish
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The fish
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 market was located just below the
farmland
 lower
side
 of the map. In 2001, it is obvious that
farmland
have
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 eliminated and rebuilt sports facilities with
swimming
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a swimming
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 pool, hotel and tennis court.
Therefore
, the right
side
 of the high street shops
have
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 become apartments.
Although
 the golf course and high street with shops remain
at
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 the same places.
Lower
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The lower
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side
 of the map
having
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had
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 been converted into a public beach from a Marine pier, while
cafe
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the cafe
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 and hotel remained with a whole new car parking area.
Also
,
fish
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the fish
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 market completely vanished and
replaced
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was replaced
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 with a private beach.
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