At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

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countries. Among them, some countries reveal
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will make considerable of young positive changes in our habitat.
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force, and young people will ability to quickly
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com consumption market.
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"disadvantages.
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the pressure on housing, the environment, and improving the quality of life. The
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us lots of benefits but the older are
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indispensable for the whole community.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • demographic
  • workforce
  • productivity
  • innovation
  • skilled labor
  • social development
  • technology
  • dividend
  • competition
  • resources
  • social welfare
  • unrest
  • instability
  • healthcare
  • elderly care
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