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Government should provide benefits to the log time job seekers. Is it good or bad. Given reasons and examples

It is a crucial thing that everyone should be employed, as the governments provide special privileges for the
job
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 seekers by giving them
unemployment
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 funds.
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whether
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 it is beneficial that long-time
job
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 seekers should get
government
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benefits
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 or not. To commence with, there are multiple reasons why the
unemployment
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 fund for the jobless candidates is unnecessary as they don’t make effort in getting a
job
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,
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 addition to that they have
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financial backup from the
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. All the unemployed candidates would depend on
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government
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 schemes rather than developing their skills.
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, in Australia, the
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 will provide $800 per week under the
unemployment
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 scheme act which is almost equal to
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weekly pay of a part-time
employer
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employment
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 as
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 results in
shortage
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a shortage
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 of workers.
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, the
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benefits
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 should be useful to the candidates who have
physical
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 ability, can work only with certain medical conditions and
who
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are facing financial hardship. As they seek support from the
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 in terms of money and working rights.
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, a physically challenged person working in a retail store has lost their
job
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 because of the lockdown during the pandemic time.
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, it is the
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’s responsibility to support
people
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 with disability under some special conditions
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 as
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 funding and subsidies
in
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on
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 electricity and water bills. Overall,
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 encourages them to overcome the challenges in their daily life. In conclusion,
although
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 the
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benefits
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 all sections of the
people
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 in
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society. The
government
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benefits
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 for the long-time
jobseekers
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job seekers
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 should be given to the
people
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 who are unemployed because of disability and not to
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normal
people
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.

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