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To meet the growing need for food to support an increasing population, a country should make use of edible insects as a food source. However, some people believe that insects are not only unhealthy but harvesting them will also negatively affect nature. What are the benefits and drawbacks of eating insects?

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 that introducing edible
insects
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 human diets would help the shortage of food and support the growing population while other
people
 think it may damage
natures
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 and it is unhealthy
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why implementing
insects
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people
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 diets could be damaging
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earth
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 biodiversity. There are many reasons why
people
 think that there are some advantages including
insects
 in meals
Firstly
 is a common
opinionthat
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opinion that
 the introduction of animals
such
like
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 ants and beetles will help reduce deforestation,
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new
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 land fields.
Secondly
,
people
 could have more options for nutrition
instead
 of depending on one type,
for
instance
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 beef which gives just vitamins B.
Thirdly
, in Thailand, in many rural areas
insects
 are already part of everyday diet. On the other side, introducing a similar Thai alimentation worldwide may have a negative impact on the earth's ecosystem for various reasons.
To begin
 with, birds and chickens may become extinct as birds' nourishment is
insects
.
In addition
, the constant increase of
people
 on the planet who tries to satisfy human needs will be a huge drawback for not only birds but for every other living
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, who may
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not have enough food to survive.
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, the body system is not made
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 digest
this
 kind of food
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 found
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university
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explain
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 that some
insects
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 fluids are poison
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the human’s
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human’s
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 liver. In conclusion, despite the majority of
people
 agreeing to adopt a new alimental regime
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 be beneficial for
reduce
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 pollution due
deforestation
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 protein source, the research proves that it can cause more important damage to our ecosystems.
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