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Some parents buy their children a large number of toys to play with. What are the advantages and disadvantages for the child of having a large number of toys?

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Some people provide their
children
a
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with a
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widenumber
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wide number
 of playthings for their
children
 to play with them,
,
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personallythat
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personally that
 a large number of
toys
 can affect
children
 the pectations. for disadvantage we can say when
children
 have a large number of playthings ,maybe it
take
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takes
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effect
 on the
children
's life.
firstly
 ,when the kid has any
toys
 who don’t know the value of their plaything , for an instant, the kid doesn’t keep safe them.
secondly
 , a large of facilities for the
children
 can bring a kid to spoil, and spoiled brats are not lovely .
finally
, many numbers of
toys
 don’t use ever because the kids growing up and
toys
 are
unusefull
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unuseful
useful
. and for advantage we
ca
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can
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 refer to refer great numbers of
toys
 for
children
 have some positive
effect
 on their mental kids which they can imagine the different situations with the
toys
 in their mental and make a story with them.
for example
 with small animals
toys
 can make the zoo story, and different type of
toys
 help them to makes different stories.when
the
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children
 think about making an anecdote their brain was brains active and it has a positive
effect
 on their intelligence. In conclusion, we understand that having a large number of plaything is good for the
children
 when makes their minds active and
also
 have a bad
effect
 on
children
’s behaviour.
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