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The table illustrates the percentage of Canadians in
households
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 by a variety of
families
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 type between 1984 and 2020.

Overall, the figure for
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single person, single parents and
households
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 with no children exhibited upward trends over the years, whereas the number of those whose
families
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 with kids in Canada showed a decline.

At
first
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, the percentage of a single person was only 6% in 1984, and the number increased steadily to 12% after the year 2020, doubling from the beginning of the time.
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, DINK
families
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 in which
households
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 are two incomes and no children were less than one-fifth, with 19% in 1984;
however
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, it increased by 6% in 2014, and levelled out at the end of the time, with one-fourth of Canadian
households
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 proportion. It is witnessed that the figure for lone parents was only 4% before it experienced a threefold rise to 12% in 2014 and remained the same until 2020.
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, those
families
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 with dependent children were more than half (52%) in 1984, yet it saw a significant decrease by 16% in 2020, which was the greatest difference and still the largest sector of all different family types.
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, those who had non-dependent kids were at 10% at the beginning of the period and had a slight fall to 9% after a 36-year stage.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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