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Some people think that scientists experimenting animals in a laboratory is the only way we can guarantee new products will be safe for human use. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Animal testing – the
use
 of
animals
 in laboratory
experiments
 – is a topic that/which has polarised public opinion. Many people opine that it is the only way to ensure product safety for human
use
.
This
 essay sheds light on reasons why I totally disagree with
this
 opinion. It is understandable why a lot of people are convinced that using
animals
 is the one and only way to make certain that a product is safe for humans.
Animal
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The animal
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 is the only alternative to human since
it
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they
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 have
the
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 living body,
of
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which
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 organs resemble those of human.
Besides
 that,
animals
 are farmed in large quantities while humans are unique and irreplaceable. A person taking the risk of participating in laboratory
experiments
 can lead to
the
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opposition from family members,
therefore
, they are against the act of volunteering for
safety
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a safety
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test
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.
However
, there is no denying that advancing technology has ushered in many viable alternatives to animal testing. One approach is to replace
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animal
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animals
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 with
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the algorithm
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algorithm
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algorithms
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. To be more specific,
computational
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the computational
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 model can be developed to crunch research data,
hence
 comparing tested chemicals and new, untested ones with a similar structure. Since
computational
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the computational
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model
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models
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 can make
reliable
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a reliable
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prediction
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 about the toxicity of the untested
chemial
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chemical
, we can avoid the
use
 of
innocient
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innocent
animals
.
Moreover
, one other novel way is to culture human cells. Given the fact
the
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 human cells can mimic the functioning of human organs,
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 on the simplified version of organs can deliver more human-relevant results than animal
experiments
. In conclusion,
although
 it is undeniable that animal testing has laid foundations for important discoveries, there are several promising alternatives to the
use
 of living
animals
 in
experiments
. Concerns over ethics, efficiency and human relevance have driven the hunt for other alternatives.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • guarantee
  • safe
  • human use
  • scientists
  • experimenting
  • laboratory
  • animal testing
  • valuable information
  • alternative methods
  • equally effective
  • product safety
  • ethical concerns
  • cruel
  • inhumane
  • technologies
  • advancements
  • research
  • reduce
  • replace
  • regulations
  • guidelines
  • ethical treatment
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