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Write about the following topic: Some people believe that children should be made disciplined by making them obey rules and do what their parents and teachers want them to do. Others, however, believe that those children who are controlled are not well-prepared to tackle the challenges life brings to them. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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Children
 are the future generations and they play a pivotal role in the development of the nation. Some
communities
 believe that offspring should follow
rules
 and
regulations
 to behave like a well-disciplined community by obeying their parents and
children
.
However
, some other
communities
 argue with
this
 matter and say that Offspring, who are controlled by their elders, are not able to face the challenges in their life. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both scenarios and
then
 I will give my opinion on
this
 matter with some relevant examples. On the one side, Some
communities
 say that it is better to control their offspring with
rules
 and
regulations
. Nowadays,
Rules
 and
regulations
 play a vital role in any sector because nobody has any right to punish any community. So, by following
rules
 and
regulations
 offspring will obey their elders
otherwise
 without these
rules
 they are out of their hands.
For instance
, In the USA, teachers have no right to punish their
children
 physically so they give some homework and ask them to complete it within the given deadline,
otherwise
, offspring may misuse their freedom. On the other side, Some
communities
 believe that controlled offspring may not have the ability to face challenging tasks in their career. When the offspring are restricted
then
 they don't have a chance to show their talent and it may
also
 affect them to be an introvert.
For instance
, My school friend, who is a talented Tennis player but her family have some
rules
 and
regulations
 to not be a part of sports so, she dropped from the game and continued her studies.
Moreover
, Controlled
communities
 will not have many ideas to face tasks in their life because they will feel the fear to do new things.
For instance
, In the IT sector, HR selects multitasking candidates due to advancements in technology but some candidates who are mostly controlled by their society only learn required tasks but not focusing on their future. To sum up, I agree with both statements because both have their own priority to bring up
children
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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