Many manufactured food and drink products contain high level of sugars which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?
Now a day,
fast moving
lifestyle and eating more junk food and drinking beverages Add a hyphen
fast-moving
is
creating more and more Change the verb form
are
Add a hyphen
health-related
health related
issue in Add a hyphen
health-related
current
generation like it is Correct article usage
the current
increasing
blood Replace the word
increased
sugar
level. I strongly agree that such
products
prize
should increase
by government
. In Correct article usage
the government
further
discourse, I will enunciate ideas in favor
of my belief with some opposite Change the spelling
favour
belief
some Fix the agreement mistake
beliefs
people
have.
To begin
with, beverages and food available in current
market Add an article
the current
contains
Change the verb form
contain
to
much artificial Correct your spelling
too
sugar
to make product
sweeter but it will Correct article usage
the product
impact
more on Correct article usage
the person
person
Change noun form
person's
sugar
level and more people
will face health
problems like diabetic
so Replace the word
diabetes
this
must need to be control
. As an example, in some countries, Change the verb form
be controlled
government
is banning Add an article
the government
selling
of Add an article
the selling
such
beverages in
Change preposition
on
market
. Add an article
the market
Furthermore
, young child
are more prone to attract Fix the agreement mistake
children
such
kind
of Fix the agreement mistake
kinds
products
and so it will impact
more on their health
also
. To stop such
issues, there is one simple way is government should make such
products
more expensive so that people
can not buy it
easily and so that consumption will get Correct pronoun usage
them
reduce
.
On the opposite side, some Wrong verb form
reduced
people
not
agree with Change the verb form
do not
did not
such
kind of prize
Correct your spelling
price
increase
because they think that increase
in Add an article
the prize
prize
will lead to inflation in Correct your spelling
price
country
and Add an article
the country
moreover
, it
will Correct pronoun usage
apply
impact
the business of sugar
factory
and Fix the agreement mistake
factories
products
manufacturers so Change the noun form
product
people
should control their sugar
level by self
.
To recapitulate, There are some strong reasons like these Correct pronoun usage
themselves
products
can harm person’s health
and can impact
chile lifestyle and health
by which I am recommending for prize
increase
on these product
but some Change the determiner
this product
these products
people
believe that this
can impact
country and manufacturer economy so sugar
control can be done in other
way.Change the wording
another
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