Many manufactured food and drink products contain high level of sugars which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

Now a day,
fast moving
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lifestyle and eating more junk food and drinking beverages
is
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creating more and more
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health-related
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health related
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issue in
current
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generation like it is
increasing
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blood
sugar
level. I strongly agree that
such
products
prize
should
increase
by
government
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the government
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. In
further
discourse, I will enunciate ideas in
favor
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of my belief with some opposite
belief
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some
people
have.
To begin
with,  beverages and food available in
current
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market
contains
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to
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too
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much artificial
sugar
to make
product
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the product
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sweeter but it will
impact
more on
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the person
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person
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person's
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sugar
level and more
people
will face
health
problems like
diabetic
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so
this
must need to
be control
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. As an example, in some countries,
government
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is banning
selling
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of
such
beverages
in
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on
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market
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.
Furthermore
, young
child
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children
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are more prone to attract
such
kind
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kinds
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of
products
and so it will
impact
more on their
health
also
. To stop
such
issues, there is one simple way is government should make
such
products
more expensive so that
people
can not buy
it
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them
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easily and so that consumption will get
reduce
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. On the opposite side, some
people
not
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do not
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agree with
such
kind of
prize
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price
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increase
because they think that
increase
in
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the prize
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prize
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price
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will lead to inflation  in
country
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the country
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and
moreover
,
it
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apply
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will
impact
the business of
sugar
factory
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factories
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and
products
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product
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manufacturers so
people
should control their
sugar
level by
self
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themselves
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. To recapitulate, There are some strong reasons like these
products
can harm person’s
health
and can
impact
chile lifestyle and
health
by which I am recommending for
prize
increase
on
these product
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this product
these products
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but some
people
believe that
this
can
impact
country and manufacturer economy so
sugar
control can be done in
other
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way.
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