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The development of tourism contributed to English becoming the most prominent language in the world. Some people think that it will lead to English becoming the only language to be spoken globally. What are the advantages and disasvantages to having one language in the world?

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English
language
 may become the only
language
 spoken in the world in the future owing to the developments in
tourism
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the tourism
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 sector. The trend would bring positive as well as negative changes
into
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 the world. There are two principal benefits of having only
one
language
.
Firstly
,
people
 would not need to spend time
on
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studying a new
language
 to widen their opportunities. At the present time, many
people
 spend years
to learn
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learning
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English
 because it is needed for their education or work. Education institutions in England,
for example
, require a high level of
English
 proficiency.
Secondly
, it is much easier to understand other
people
 when they speak the same
language
 as you since it minimizes misconceptions between different
cultures
 and countries.
Nevertheless
, these benefits do not overweigh the disadvantages of having only
one
language
.
English
 or any other
language
 becoming the only
language
 spoken would destroy the diversity of the world and alienize some
cultures
. Languages are strongly attached to
the
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history and play
the
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 major role in
the
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culture
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 development. Having
one
language
 would result in
cultures
 being similar to each other.
This
,
therefore
, will lead to
destruction
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the destruction
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 of the
cultures
 that have been developing for decades.
In addition
, the trend might lead to the alienization of some
cultures
 since some
people
 still would speak the
language
 better than others.
This
 is because it has been proven that adapting to a new
language
 as a nation may take up to a decade. In conclusion, the population of the planet speaking
one
language
 has positive sides as well as negative sides.
However
,
disadvantages
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 of the trend are far greater than
advantages
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the advantages
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 since the diversity of
cultures
 may be harmed.
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