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Finding job satisfaction is considered to be a luxury in many developing countries. Why do you think that is? Do you think job satisfaction is important?

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Perhaps those who live in developed
countries
 think that
job
satisfaction
 is the basis of
people
's choice for different jobs, and it is their level of
job
satisfaction
 that makes them stay in one
job
 continuously for a long time. But
this
 is quite different in developing
countries
. Living conditions in developing
countries
 are
such
 that the least importance is given to the mental and social health of individuals. High inflation, high cost of living, low quality of life, lack of work opportunities,
awfully
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 low wages are the reasons why
people
 are satisfied with the least because they need
this
 income,
however
 small, to be able to make a living.
This
 is why
job
satisfaction
 is considered
as
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a luxury dimension of the
job
 and
people
 inevitably prioritize other things. According to experts,
job
satisfaction
 is a set of feelings and beliefs that
people
 have about their current jobs.
Job
satisfaction
 is one of the important factors in
job
 success and it is mentioned as a
factor
 that increases efficiency and
also
 the feeling of personal
satisfaction
. In my opinion,
someone
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 who has been working in a developing country in one of those
countries
 for several years, thinking about
job
satisfaction
 and its level is not very important.
This
 does not mean that we are unaware of the importance of
this
 issue, it is quite the opposite, but as mentioned earlier, many factors cause
this
 important
factor
 not to be considered
as
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in developed
countries
. Ultimately, the luxury of considering
this
 very important and fundamental
factor
 is widely seen in developing
countries
 and sometimes even ignored. But
this
 disregard never diminishes the importance of
this
 vital
factor
.
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