Men and women employed in full time Jobs should share the responsibilities of household chores. Do you agree or disagree. Share relevant personal experiences.

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Gender equality is a reality in
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current modern world,
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most
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and
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are employed in
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full time
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jobs. Many people believe that both
men
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and
women
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should share the responsibilities of household chores equally and I strongly agree with
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statement
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I will elaborate more in the following paragraphs. Nowadays, in
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modern era, most
men
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and
women
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need to work to be able to support their family's needs and costs.
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, I believe that they should share the chores of the
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alternately or together. My husband is the one to return
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home before me,mostly
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, so, he starts to cook for the
kids
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. If he would have waited for me to cook, it is sure that I would be exhausted and the dinner would be served late. Eventually, all couples should do
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proper planning of the task loads at home to be able to care for the
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and have a balanced life.
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, there are some
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who have their
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and
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do not help at all at home. Sadly, the
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are exhausted,
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and feel
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alone and there might be some misunderstanding in their couple as well. I think every parent should encourage their
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since
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a young, irrespective of their gender to help
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the chore of the
house
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. When a woman has the support of his life partner, she feels complete and is encouraged to perform more. To exemplify, my husband is the one to get the
kids
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ready to go to school as I need to leave the
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early each morning as I have
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a long
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along
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distance to travel. In conclusion, I strongly believe that both
men
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and
women
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need to distribute among them the
house
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responsibilities equally for the
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of their
kids
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and their partners. All parents should encourage their
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for
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equal sharing of household tasks and
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finally
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when they grow up, it becomes a habit and a culture.
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