Young are encouraged to take a year off after finishing high school in before the university. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this

In certain countries, youngsters are encouraged to explore real-time experiences
such
as work or travel before starting their
university
life
. While there are many benefits to it, there are
also
some drawbacks to consider. In
this
essay, we will investigate both
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positive and negative aspects of it. The main advantages of taking a gap
year
are getting a chance to learn more about the world and earning money. For students who just have finished their secondary school, working or
traveling
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for a
year
will provide more sense to them
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how difficult
life
can be outside of the education system and make them responsible
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it.
Furthermore
, higher education is very expensive and a lot of students choose to work for 12 months and save up money before they begin their studies.
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,
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British magazine recently reported that the average student at a UK
university
requires over £12,000 per annum to survive and many drop out because they cannot afford to pay. Despite these positive impacts,
this
year
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gap, unless used properly, can negatively affect their CV forms when applying for competitive jobs in the future and they get used to working or
traveling
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and do not want to return to a
life
of study.
For example
, according to BBC news, 45% of Myanmar students take a gap
year
and most of them do not want to study again for
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as they are used to working and earning money. In conclusion, the new tradition of teenagers
to work
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before their
university
studies consists of not only merits
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but
also
many demerits in their beginning of public
life
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gap year
  • work experience
  • internships
  • traveling
  • life experiences
  • personal development
  • independent
  • self-reliant
  • educational progress
  • graduation timeline
  • financial burden
  • academic momentum
  • structured academic environment
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