Some people think that government should spend on medical facilities whereas other people think that investing on transport is necessary. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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this
era of
modernisation
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some fields have got less attention
by
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the
law maker
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. A number of individuals believe that capital on
health
department should be increased while few consider that spending on
transportation
is crucial.
This
essay intends to analyze both perspectives. I,
however
, favour of former view. On the one hand, with better modes of
transportation
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the economy of a particular
country
could reach
to
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new heights.
In other words
, as there will be better means of transport
then
moving goods to any part of the
country
would be very convenient.
Moreover
,it will help farmers as well as industrialists to trade at a very low cost.
For instance
, Srilanka a
country
that had developed in a very short time followed the same procedure by increasing the capital on automobiles used for moving goods.
Thus
, a nation could achieve a lot by investing in
transportation
.
On the other hand
, as high chunks of money would be invested
on
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the medical department it will reduce the ratio of death due to the lack of proper
health
facilities.To elaborate
it
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, in rural areas
their
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is on average 60% death due to lack of medical amenities
this
could be tackled by introducing more hospitals as well as
health
surveys in the rural areas.
For example
, in
Africa
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80% of civilians die due to lack of
health
care but the scenario changed as authorities provided a large amount of money in the medical field.
As a result
, the ratio decreased to 40%.
Moreover
, it will
also
increase the infant mortality rate of a
country
.
Therefore
, it is imperative to invest in the
health
department. In conclusion, even though
transportation
increases
economy
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of a
country
but I believe that saving
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individual's
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life by providing proper
health
care is a major point which cannot be neglected.
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