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Some people think that government should spend on medical facilities whereas other people think that investing on transport is necessary. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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 era of
modernisation
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 some fields have got less attention
by
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 the
law maker
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. A number of individuals believe that capital on
health
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 department should be increased while few consider that spending on
transportation
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 is crucial.
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 essay intends to analyze both perspectives. I,
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, favour of former view. On the one hand, with better modes of
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transportation
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 the economy of a particular
country
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 could reach
to
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new heights.
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, as there will be better means of transport
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 moving goods to any part of the
country
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 would be very convenient.
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,it will help farmers as well as industrialists to trade at a very low cost.
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 , Srilanka a
country
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 that had developed in a very short time followed the same procedure by increasing the capital on automobiles used for moving goods.
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, a nation could achieve a lot by investing in
transportation
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.
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, as high chunks of money would be invested
on
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 the medical department it will reduce the ratio of death due to the lack of proper
health
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 facilities.To elaborate
it
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apply
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, in rural areas
their
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 is on average 60% death due to lack of medical amenities
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 could be tackled by introducing more hospitals as well as
health
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 surveys in the rural areas.
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, in
Africa
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 80% of civilians die due to lack of
health
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 care but the scenario changed as authorities provided a large amount of money in the medical field.
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, the ratio decreased to 40%.
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, it will
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 increase the infant mortality rate of a
country
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.
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, it is imperative to invest in the
health
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 department. In conclusion, even though
transportation
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 increases
economy
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the economy
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 of a
country
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 but I believe that saving
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an individual's
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individual's
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 life by providing proper
health
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 care is a major point which cannot be neglected.
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