Some people think that media have the right to publish details of people's private lives, while others think it should be controlled. Discuss both views.

Most people
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that
media
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the media
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has a right to establish
citizen's
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citizens'
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personal
life
, whereas others do believe that it is needed to be controlled.
This
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views with examples. It is a
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dilemma
that
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the media
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is rightful to publish every
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, they think
that
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would be useful for their account. Most of the time
media
post
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newspapers and television to increase their viewership, as
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part of their job
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description
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, for which, they
also
portrays
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acts of
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corrupt
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politicians
politicans
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politicians
and businessmen. Spreading illegal acts of
such
personalities on to the mass
media
, aware others to learn
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who are
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the same boat, The fear that
such
announcements will disclose their personal
life
, make them perform work with honesty and
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loyalty
.
For example
, A corrupt political leader's wife had to go to disgrace, when she was identified by the audience at
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they
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restaurant
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restaurant
, where they
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calling her 'theif' loudly.
On the contrary
, not everyone is comfortable with living their
life
openly and
therefore
, misleading
an
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information
of
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a
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someone's personal
life
, without their consent should be controlled. Since
,
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this
will make people
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loose
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their
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interest
from
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their privacy and personal time
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with
the
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love
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ones. Most of the time, a wrong disclosure about someone's
life
can lead to distress and depression, due to public shaming.
For instance
, a random video was got viral of a tourist girl who was dancing with her friends, which was
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later
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latter
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converted into funny memes
as a result
, she suffered from social anxiety and depression. In conclusion,
although
the
media
sharing every detail openly gets a betterment of society, on the other side it can
also
cause a person mental distress.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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