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Some people think that it is more important to spend money on roads and motorways than on public transport system. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is true that nowadays
transportation
 is
major
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 concern
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in
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is
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 every developing country. Many people opine that it is significant to allocate some budget
on
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 public
transportation
 amenities to get rid of
transportation
 matters. I disagree with
this
 statement.
This
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 in the ensuing paragraphs. There are plenty of reasons for
this
 implementation.
Firstly
, it helps to reduce tremendous strain on the environment.
Vehicle
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emit
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an
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exhaust fumes
to
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 the air, which would be declined by
this
 policy.
In addition
, it can
also
 mitigate
greenhouse
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 effect
to
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 the whole planet.
Secondly
,
traffic
 congestion would be reduced. People would prefer to use public vehicles if
it
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provide
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 more facilities
in
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 affordable prices.
As a result
, it solves the
traffic
 issues. Recently, the Delhi government facilitated metro trains to combat
a
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traffic
 issues.
Consequently
, more peoples prefer to do
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the journey
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journey
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journeys
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in
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the
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train
instead
 of using their own vehicles. Apart from that, it can be profitable for
the
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city dwellers in many ways.
The public
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transportation
 provides easy and convenient journeys. These days,
government
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 allocated special railways tracks and buses land for the fastest
transportation
. Some metro trains developed with technological entertainment facilities which attract the
poeple
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people
 .
Lastly
, Accidental cases may
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, which happen unexpectedly and unintentionally
especially
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 in
metropolitan
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the metropolitan
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area
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. It
causing
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 severe injury and damage. To conclude, I reiterate my opinion that authorities should use some money on
the
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public vehicles to decrease air pollution and heavy
traffic
. It is
also
 beneficial for communities in ways of safe and comfortable
transportation
.
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