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Health services are the basic necessity for a person. Private companies have make the health services quite costly for ordinary individuals. Do the advantages of private health care outweight its disadvantages.

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The expensive cost of private
health
 providers has been an ongoing discussion among regular
people
.
Although
 everyone deserves equal treatment when it comes to
health
, most
people
 may agree that there is still a large discrepancy between the quality of both private and public
health
services
.
This
 essay will explore whether it is worth it to spend extra pennies on private
healthcare
. Even if the high price of private
healthcare
 becomes a major concern for regular
people
, it is undeniable that most
people
 would still risk getting into debt in order to get the benefits of the
services
. Private
health
 providers tend to work faster and prioritize their patients. Most
people
 are getting the right treatment at the right time. Some
people
also
 observed that the doctors and nurses are more friendly and attentive because they are well-paid. When
people
 are in the middle of a
health
 crisis, they need hospitality, safety, and assurance. Most private
healthcare
 provided
this
 and
that is
 why
people
 do not mind paying extra dollars. Meanwhile, public
healthcare
 is the
last
 resort
people
 usually go for. Even though they are a lot cheaper, it is clear that most
people
 share unpleasant experiences with them. Most public
health
services
 are too busy and crowded, which makes it hard for patients to get fast medication. It is even more alarming for
people
 who are in the middle of an emergency and needed quick hospitalization. Imagine how many lives are lost in the queue alone. So even though public
healthcare
 is cheap or free, they do not provide the assurance and safety that private
healthcare
 can offer. To conclude, the benefits of private
healthcare
 outweighs its drawbacks.
This
 situation could be improved if public
healthcare
 improves its
services
 but until
then
, private
healthcare
 is still winning in terms of how they are taking care and prioritizing their patients.
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