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Many people believe that it's better to learn something in group rather than individually. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #group
In our society, education is the most obvious part of our lives, which is
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 and successful
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. In the system of education, there are many systems of learning. So, it is believed, that
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 is more effective rather than individually. I am
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strongly
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 in favour of
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 many reasons.
First
 of all, students, especially in elementary school, are not so patient for
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 in groups: children will talk a lot, laugh and
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 their focus on studying.
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, individual learning helps you to concentrate, be
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not disturb
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entertainment
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 and discussions.
Secondly
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team works
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teamwork
, almost
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 student will rely not only on himself,
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, on every child
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 the team. It
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 procrastination and laziness.
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 will not avoid
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 of domination of some students. For sure, there will be
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 student, who is
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, indeed,
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, who is extravert will get more from
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. In two words, more communicable persons will learn more, yet, silent children, who feel uncomfortable in close
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, will not get knowledge clearly. In brief, I completely disagree with people, who
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, that learning in groups is more effective than individual
work
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • collaborative environment
  • discussion
  • debate
  • exchange of ideas
  • critical soft skills
  • communication
  • teamwork
  • leadership
  • emotional and motivational support
  • isolating
  • personalized pace
  • efficient learning
  • self-discipline
  • accountability
  • educational progress
  • distractions
  • group dynamics
  • commitment
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