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what are the pros and cons for children of watching tv

In
this
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children
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 watch television is becoming increasingly popular. Young ones,
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can easily be addicted to watching vibrant images and hilarious characters shown on
tv
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 programs.
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, there are both pros and cons to
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 matter. In
this
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 essay, I will delve into the advantages and disadvantages of
children
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 watching small screens. Let's begin by looking at the advantages of
children
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 watching
tv
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. In terms of education, watching
tv
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 is an effective method for kids. Not only can they understand moral stories through cartoons but they can
also
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 accumulate knowledge about life around them through nature programs.
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 is the particular case for learning about the animal world, watching wild creatures on
tv
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 provides
children
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 with visual and lively pictures without them actually going to the forest to see animals.
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,
parents
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 are likely to have more spare time. While the kid is indulging itself in the programmes,
parents
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 can be able to do their own thing
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 as resting and they don’t have to always keep the child entertained. Turning to the
otherside
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other side
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argument, watching
tv
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 is
also
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 harmful to
children
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.
Firstly
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, it is likely inevitable for
children
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 to see inappropriate scenes.
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parents
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 can set up Adblock on their
tv
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, 35%
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children
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of children
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 will still accidentally watch a violent advertisement or moment containing bloody animal fighting scenes according to The Guardian in 2015.
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,
TV
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 addiction has numerous adverse effects on
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children’s
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childrens’
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children's
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 health. their eyes are susceptible to blue light, which makes the eyes weaker. The number of
children
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 wearing
glass
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glasses
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 is becoming more and more common these days.
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, kids tend to spend hours fixing their eyes on
tv
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 channels so they don’t have enough time or are too lazy to do physical activities that benefit their health
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 as doing exercise.
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, it leads to a sedentary lifestyle. To conclude,
tv
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 plays a vital role in providing background knowledge for
children
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 and letting their
parents
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 have some more time to rest but it
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 can’t be denied that small screen programmes can lead to eye disease and an inactive lifestyle.

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