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People who live in busy cities are in many ways at a disadvantage to those who live in rural areas. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Many
people
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 believe that living in
the
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 bustling city
have
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 a lot of drawbacks compared to
countryside
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the countryside
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. In
this
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 essay, I will give my opinion and state reasons for the same.
Firstly
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, I will discuss
about
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the economic advantages of
life
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living
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 in
cities
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.
Secondly
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, I will explore the aspects of social life in
cities
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 and rural
areas
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.
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 with, the developed towns have large factories and industries operating continuously and giving more opportunities
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 employment.
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, a person in
urban
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an urban
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 area can opt out of any of the careers available he is interested in, whereas,
people
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 in villages have to do farming or animal husbandry for their living.
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,
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healthcare facilities and hospitals are
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abundant in metropolitan
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.
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, making
people
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 safer in terms of health and well-being.
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, In small villages, the
bed’s
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availability
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 in hospitals and health
centers
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 is extremely limited,
also
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 the number of waiting hours is too long as there
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 scarce
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qualified doctors. Humans in urban
cities
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 and suburbs have
exciting
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 and happening social life. As there are quite many hangout places and social
centers
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 for gatherings and meeting friends and family.
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,
people
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 in
cities
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 have many things to do during their week-off time. Whereas, for
people
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 living in rural
areas
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 the options are often limited due to no clubs and
handful
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 of social
centers
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.
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 to that,
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travelling is quite easy due to
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 good frequency of public transportation,
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 the time of travel is less due to better condition of roadways compared to rural villages. In conclusion, I strongly disagree
to
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 the above-mentioned view. In my opinion, due to many reasons,
people
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 living in metropolitan
cities
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 are
at
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huge
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a huge
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 advantage compared to those living in rural
areas
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,
People
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 in rural
areas
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 manage to live with
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a number
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 of limitations in terms of infrastructure and employment.
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