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Tourism is causing environmental problems all around the world. What are the main causes of this? What are some solutions.

#tourism #world
It is true that many ordinary
people
 have
instincted
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instinctive
instinct
instructed
dream
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to be explorers .Someone would like to join some tourism project to the area out of the edge of civilizations, like the inner land of Africa ,
Snow
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 mountains in Tibet or some caves few
people
knew
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.
According to
 stories from media or environment protection NGO's reports, many tourism projects have caused problems
on
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 environmental issues everywhere. One of the most common topics is tourists
left numerous
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 trash over the mountains, even at the boot of Hi
malaya
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Malaya
Himalaya
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snow mountain. Most of them are made of plastic which needs hundreds
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years to decay. Another issue is
that
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the destruction or
irrepairable
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irreparable
influence on the local environment , especially in some Caves, which are sensitive to light.The third problem is species invasion . Most of them happened
o
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n
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the
Island.
W hile
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some visitors arrive on the island, they could bring some ants from home which destroyed the whole balance of the local ecological balance. Social
activiters
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activities
activists
have done
lobby
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 for many years in west
world
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Westworld
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. They believe the crucial method to absolve the problem is legitimacy . They want to set laws or bills to protect special zones and
forbiden
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forbid
people
 from
such
area
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, except they could get permission from
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environment protection ministry. Another way
people
 should try is
propagenda
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propaganda
. Media
people
 should cover more stories on environmental issues to the public , setting the agenda on green topics.
While
 the public
have
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more sense
on
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the topic, it will be very helpful to decrease the hurt from human kinds to our earth. In
my
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conclusion, I hope everyone who loves to travel or
be
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is
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favourite to explore , should understand that protecting the earth is our duty.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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