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In many countries, people now wear western-style dresses such as suits and jeans rather than traditional clothing. Why is this? Is this a positive or negative development?

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people
TPeople
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People
 in various regions around the world
have
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 a tendency to dress up in western pieces of clothing like suits and jeans,
instead
 of traditional costumes.
This
 can be due to
those
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 following reasons. The
first
 thing is the feeling of inconvenience caused by some
sorts
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 of traditional clothing while performing some acts. Some costumes have really bizarre and complicated designs that contain
numbers
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 of small details, which might be an obstacle for any acts requiring speed or flexibility.
Moreover
, it can be a daunting challenge to be on time for whoever is in a hurry while having trouble wearing them neatly.
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, kimonos have
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 unusual way to wear which is folding layers of fabric and using a belt to keep them nice and firm. People have
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rights
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 to decide what they wear, as long as they feel comfortable with their choice.
Hence
, wearing traditional clothing should not always be considered
as
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a must but an option.
However
, under some specific circumstances,
such
 as national festivals, traditional
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