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Some people think that it is more important to plant more trees in open area in towns and cities than build more housing. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Recently environmental conservation is becoming a big topic, many
people
 believe that planting more
trees
 in towns and cities is more important than constructing more buildings. In my opinion, even though buildings are everyone's fundamental thing, planting
trees
 is more important in terms of nurturing
people
's
health
 and saving our planet. Houses are a place that provides comfort and warmth to
people
, everyone deserves a home. Nowadays, according to the growing population, more and more buildings are needed in order to provide enough shelter for
people
. But, in order to do that, natural resources
such
 as land and
trees
 might be destroyed which could affect
people
's mental
health
 and physical
health
 in the future. The
health
 of our planet and
people
 living in cities should be prioritised. Our planet is a place full of natural resources that have been providing us food and home for a million years, unluckily, overpopulation and over construction become risk factors for losing
this
 beautiful home. The great solution for solving
this
 problem is planting more
trees
 which is an effective way to heal our mother nature. Many studies show that repairing the ecosystem by planting more
trees
 can reduce CO2 in the atmosphere, cool down the temperature, decrease pollution which comes from cars and factories in the cities, and so on. Apart from that,
trees
 can provide us with a healthy environment which is important to every being's life. In conclusion,
although
 building more houses is essential in the modern world, planting more
trees
 is a must in order to protect our world which can continue to provide a comfortable place to live our lives. In my opinion, I agree that
people
 should plant more
trees
 in crowded city areas rather than build more houses.
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