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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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These days, society is developing, and the distinctions between class, religion, and sex are
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 more and more equal than in the past. Many people think that universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in all subjects. And I totally agree with the above point. According to the view of the ancient ancestors,
men
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 should shoulder the social work while
women
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 should only stay at home to take care of the family.
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, in the past, the value of
women
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 was always underestimated and underestimated compared to
men
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. For the same reason,
women
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 are less likely to attend school than
men
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.
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, ​​​​when my grandmother was young, her family had a lot of brothers and sisters and most of the brothers would be more loved and would be given the best for them. The sisters will have to do all the housework and help their parents in the fields. And especially not allowed to go to school.
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, today's society no longer has so much respect for
men
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 and
women
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 as in the past. All people, of all genders, should be treated equally.
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 equality is especially evident in the university environment. Students have the right to choose the school and profession they want without being forced by family or society. In universities, it is not difficult to see that there are equal numbers of boys and girls in each subject.
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 proves that people's lives are increasingly developing and equal. In conclusion, universities should accept the same number of students from both sexes and give equal opportunities at every level.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender diversity
  • fostering innovation
  • educational experience
  • enforcing gender quotas
  • merit and potential
  • individual achievements
  • natural differences
  • gender equality
  • reducing gender stereotypes
  • balanced workforce
  • traditionally male-dominated or female-dominated fields
  • fluctuating applicant numbers
  • compromise on quality
  • diversity aspects
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