some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time .This can benefit teenageers and the community as well .to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In the current scenario, where most of the spare time is utilised on accessing mobile phones and playing video games,

society

believes that children must get involved in

community

work for free.

However

, some are in disagreement with it.

This

essay will discuss both views. On the one hand, youngsters should involve themselves in serving

society

without any charge at the early stage of life in their extra hours, by doing so,

this

will create a positive attitude towards the

community

which will be beneficial for both teenagers and

society

. They should be able to learn, how to respect and value each other and help

others

whether by money or through any other means.

For instance

community

work like, spending some hours with infants at orphanages and sharing their learnings with those infants.

This

will create a positive vibe and attitude towards helping

others

Furthermore

this

will channelise their extra time towards a good cause.

Instead

of seating idle and playing video games, their energy will be utilised in helping

others

For example

, in countries like India, where a huge amount of the population is in poverty and illiterate, youngsters can contribute by giving tuition to poor Kids.

Hence

, they should take part in

such

initiatives so that our

community

can grow equally.

On the other hand

, some believe that they should spend much available time doing extra studies.

Although

focusing on studies is important, if they were not taught how to serve

society

and contribute to the

community

then

values like sharing, helping, respect, etc. will not get developed among individuals. To illustrate, in Bollywood, youngsters of some actors get involved in harmful habits like drugs, fighting, etc. Most of them are not aware of social values, they do not seem to be respecting

others

like reporters, fans, drivers, etc. In the conclusion, in my opinion, children should be encouraged to take participate in social services, so that they would be able to learn that, if we do something for

others

we always get good things in return.

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11Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
3Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Grammar mistakes
 

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

8.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time .This can benefit teenageers and the community as well .to what extent do you agree or disagree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

With the increasing number of people travelling, there is a growing demand for more flights. What problems does this have on environment? What can be done to solve the problem?

Many people feel that most of the urgent problems can only be solved by international cooperation. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Students leave high school without learning the way how to manage their money. What are the reasons and solutions of this issue?

The image below illustrates the recycling process of discarded glass bottles. Provide a summary of the information by mentioning the main features and make appropriate comparisons wherever relevant.