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It is common for larger companies to require their staff to wear uniforms at all times. What are the benefits for a company of having a uniform? How can a uniform benefit the staff?

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It is true that many larger companies have special
request
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on
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 wearing
uniforms
 at work time. The order is
very
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logic
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 choice.
Firstly
,
to wear
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uniforms
 is
be
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benefitial
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beneficial
 for the building process of
comany
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company
 culture. One of the crucial problems in larger companies is that colleagues
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would
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whould
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should
 be
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separated
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separated
 into
small
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circle
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, and it is important to make everyone recognize that all colleagues
are belong
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 to
same
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 community.
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, it is a kind of manner in the trade area to dress in
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official
offical
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 suit , especially
on
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offical
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official
 meetings with other partners. Diversity
on
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 dressing can be seen as the symbol of
company's
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a company's
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democracy
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 spirit or
an
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evidence of
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 of the organization,
however
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 there are
also
 some ventures of
ethic
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exist
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that exist
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.
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,
usurallysleeping
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usually sleeping
 cloth, and
bikini
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bikinis
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 should be
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forbidden
forbiden
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forbidden
 in
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the work
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work place
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workplace
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, but the challenge to
manager
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the manager
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 is how to make a clear
describation
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description
descriptions
on
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 which kind of cloth
are
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 fine, which are
iligal
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illegal
, which means the best solution to the problem is wearing
uniforms
. A uniform could benefit the staff too. In larger companies,
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competition
competation
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competition
 and conflict are everywhere. The instinct weakness of
human
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 being is
judge
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 people from
his
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their
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 surface, the brand of
his
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 cloth, the price of
his
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 watch, shoes, and so on. It is very easy to find out which class the people
is
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 from. It is very unfair to most workers, especially to young colleagues.
Therefore
 with
the
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uniform
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uniforms
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 wearing, the
self confidence
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 of lower class staff could be protected
in
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 the biggest extent. In my conclusion, I do totally agree with the policy
on
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 requiring staff to wear
uniforms
 at all times.
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