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Some people think that government should spend money on railways. Others believe that there should be more investment into new roads.Are you agree or disagree

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In the recent past, the state has been spending huge amounts of money on the community’s growth. A school of thought suggests that authorities should utilise funds for the development of railway lines
instead
 of expressways. I,
however
, believe that the government should not only spend on railways but
also
 equally devote themselves to roadways for the advancement of society. On one hand, governing bodies earn a large amount of revenue from railway transportation which can lead to enhancing the economy of a particular country. In a vast country like India, tourists travel by train because of convenience, safety, timeliness and reasonable pricing.
As a result
, new railway projects have introduced fast trains in India
such
 as the Metro or "Vande Mataram" services in Delhi for visitors to save time and generate income
that is
 beneficial to the community, as well as the nation. Apart from that having
such
 reliable and fast-running trains is
also
 essential to mitigate pollution because most individuals prefer to use public transportation rather than private vehicles which proffer immense advantages towards protecting the environment.
On the other hand
, contributing to roadways
also
 plays an imperative role in countries' development. In some parts of the world, railways cannot be provided because of difficult terrain.
Therefore
, highways are the best way for citizens to commute.
Moreover
, the majority of the modes of transport use roads and in fact use them excessively.
Thus
, spending on roads
also
 offers numerous benefits for the development of townships inhabited by native citizens.
Hence
, I would conclude that utilizing money solely on railways is inadequate for the country to be successful. From my perspective, the government should expend on both means of transportation in proportion to the demand of each of them, which can advance both sectors and the economy of the nation as a whole.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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