Some people believe that a country will benefit greatly if its students study abroad. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is believed that there is a highly
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beneficial
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benefit
if
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have opportunities to pursue their education in foreign countries. Personally,
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agree with the
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assertion
that a country derives enormous benefits from abroad
students
. On the one hand, there are many benefits for young people if they
study
overseas. Through
study
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it helps people to boost their confidence and be more independent. By learning in other nations, they would have to get out of their comfort zone to get used to a completely different environment.
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the
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student who
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oversea have a good chance to improve their language skill
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communicating
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with native speakers on
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basis
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help them not to
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and
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their
abilty
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ability
. It can be seen that
this
would help them establish business relationships with foreign
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partners
parners
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partners
in the future.
On the other hand
, having way
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students
being educated overseas could be advantageous to society as a whole.
For instance
, Vietnamese
students
studying at US universities might decide to stay where they
study
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to shortage of labour resources. It can be seen that with modern facilities, great environment some people ideal locations for living which make some developing
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countries
are highly declining human resources in significant fields. In conclusion, studying abroad
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play
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important role in developing countries whereas it will have side effects
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students
are attracted by the countries where they
study
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