A lot of places in the world rely on tourist as a main source of income. Unfortunately, tourism can also be a source of problems if it is not well-managed. what are the advantages and disadvantages of tourism in the modern world? do you think that the benefits of tourism outweigh its drawbacks?

Many countries worldwide consider
tourism
as a principal source of income.
However
, if it is not correctly regulated it will
also
be troublesome.
This
essay will discuss the main
advantage
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advantages
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and
disadvantage
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disadvantages
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of
tourism
including being a
push up
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to the nation's
economy
and how it could be annoying to
locals
. I believe that the pros of
tourism
overshadow its cons. One of the greatest benefits of
tourism
is the fact that it creates numerous job opportunities for
locals
which contribute
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the prosperity of
economy
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the economy
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.
In other words
, unemployment won't be an issue in
such
touristic countries since they are usually
considred
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considered
an excellent destination for investors and a magnificent land for companies to expand their branches.
For example
, young adults with or without
high
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degree won't struggle to secure a job with all the provided opportunities.
Thus
,
tourism
can play a pivotal role in local and national
economy
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thrive
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.
On the other hand
, one of the main drawbacks of welcoming a huge amount of tourists throughout the year is that
locals
are put under
pressured
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and unfavourable
condition
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conditions
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because the
street
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are constantly crowded leading to bottleneck roads. Commuters are often faced with traffic jams and overcrowded public transportation which is a serious problem that can negatively affect the professional and academic life of many workers and students.
For instance
, it is a daily challenge for students who have to compete to secure a place
in
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the bus to make it at time to school.
Therefore
,
tourism
is a source of stress for
locals
if the road infrastructure can not cope with the
visitors
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visitor's
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volume. In conclusion, despite being a main source of income which is a great support to the local and national
economy
,
tourism
with non-adapted infrastructure is a serious issue.
Although
tourism
have
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a certain downsides
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a certain downside
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, I believe its advantages are greater by far.
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