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water scarcity is a serious problem in many countries. What are the causes of this? And what solutions can be done by individuals and the government?

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Nowadays, the advance in technology and the expansion of the factory are gradually increasing across the
world
 which resulted in global warming issues. The deficiency of water is the major impact which people are facing right now.
This
 essay will show the causes and solutions to
this
 problem.
Firstly
, it is undeniable that the increase in pollution
such
 as Carbon dioxide, Carbon monoxide and CFC was emitted from factories especially in developed countries due to the rise of the industry. These effects are not only the reasons for the contamination in water due to acid rain but
also
 causing drought in some areas.
For example
, most of us might be heard about the biggest desert in the
world
, the Sahara, but only a few know that it had been a forest 100 years ago and the cause of
this
 is the temperature change in
this
 area.
However
, it should not be forgotten that
this
 should be our responsibility to protect our
world
 and there are many ways that we could help.
For example
, we should bring a bag when we go shopping to decrease the use of plastic bags. Even if it is a little thing that we contribute to the
world
 as individuals. But if we keep doing
this
 every day, the gas which is from the disposal process will not be emitted into the atmosphere.
Moreover
, the government should regulate the policy which encourages people to use recycled products and provide tax reductions for the company which runs green CSR.
This
 policy will increase environmental awareness among people and companies. As
such
 it can be concluded that we all are the reason to cause the pollution, but we
also
 can change it by ourselves. To solve these problems, both government and ourselves should cooperate to find the solution.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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