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Demand for gas and oil is increasing and so finding new sources in remote and untouched areas is a necessity. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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In the past few decades, the need of finding new
sources
 in inaccessible
areas
 for
gas
 power has increased to maintain a higher standard of living.
This
 essay will examine the advantages and disadvantages of finding and extracting new
sources
 of
gas
 in remote
areas
. I believe that the disadvantages outweigh the advantages. At the outset, exploring a new origin for gasoline in untouched
areas
 has some benefits.
Firstly
, if
countries
 have a lot of
sources
 of
gas
, they will earn more revenue to boost their economy.
Moreover
, they will ameliorate the standard of living due to the self-sufficiency of
gas
.
Secondly
, the increasing exploitation of oil in distant regions can stabilize international fuel prices and reduce the intense demand for fossil fuels, because of fuel supply rising.
However
, interfering in
such
areas
 will increase tension between
countries
 and it has a lot of hazards to the environment and humans. In sharp contrast to
this
, I believe that
,
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 there are prominent demerits of drilling in untouched
areas
 that we can not ignore.
Firstly
, it is always known from previous experiences that, wherever people find fuel, the different
countries
 start a war to gain control. So, if
countries
 decide to research remote places, there are high chances that eventually they might end up in war.
Secondly
, most of the workers are exposed to hazards from the site, either from the tools they use or environmental factors.
Moreover
, there is always a high risk of spillage, which may result in a catastrophic impact on nature and wildlife. In conclusion,
although
 there are some pros to finding new
sources
 to provide
countries
 with oil and
gas
, the demerits can not be ignored. I believe that the demerits outweigh the merits and I think we should search for new sustainable energy.
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  • renewable energy sources
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  • economic benefits
  • job creation
  • infrastructure development
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  • habitat destruction
  • irreversible damage
  • perpetuates dependence
  • transitioning
  • indigenous and local communities
  • ethical and social challenges
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