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Some people think it is a better way to leave their home country to improve their work and living opportunities, while others think staying in their own country is a better choice. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #home #country #work #opportunities #choice
All human beings like to improve themselves in their life and try to
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achieve
achive
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achieve
 themselves in any way. These days
progress
 in life has
different
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meaning
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.
for example
, having a good job with high
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salary
 ,
progress
 in that job,
hogher
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higher
 education, etc. Some people prefer to immigrate to another
country
 to have more
chance
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 in each of these , which we see in Iran these days. In my
opinion
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this
 decision
in
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 good but as long as
this
 movement does not cause to increase
number
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 of young people in
the
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society.
On the other hand
, when being in
this
country
 and living there becomes so difficult, these people have to
imgrat
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migrate
emigrate
immigrate
 and there is no chance for improv
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 life. In the end, I prefer that if I
imigrat
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immigrate
migrate
immigrated
 to another
country
 for any
progress
, eventually back to my
country
 for
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 my
country
 because I am
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 to my
country
.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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  • professional growth
  • quality of life
  • stronger economies
  • employment opportunities
  • advancement opportunities
  • emotional bonds
  • cultural ties
  • familiar environment
  • contributing to
  • local economy
  • personal aspirations
  • cultural identity
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