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Governments and big companies should work together to reverse environmental damage, rather than making individuals responsible for that. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#governments #companies #work #damage #individuals
Humanity has a significant impact on the environment.
Although
 a vast majority of people claim it is
responsibility
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the responsibility
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 of every person to take care of the planet, I suppose corporations and local authorities are in charge of reversing the damage they had produced. In
this
 essay, I will outline
reasons
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the reasons
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 why I agree with
this
 statement.
First
 and foremost, big companies and governments are guilty of polluted atmosphere. Every year factories make a crucial carbon footprint while control organs gain bribes from them and deliberately allow violate the law.
Moreover
, it is not a secret that individuals produce less environmental injury rather than big companies. Indeed, it was revealed that if people stop using
plastic
 bags as well as start to eliminate any
plastic
 items from natural habitats like parks, oceans, and mountings it would not help creatures to survive as much as corporations remove all
plastic
 particles from their products. Another overlooked reason is not well-funded initiatives to protect eath. When it comes to matters of alternative energy sources no one will dispute
about
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the importance of raising money to make it common and publicly accessible. Nowadays many and many enterprises starts to invest
into
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 green
power
 which could be achieved by replacing traditional
power
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supplies
supplied
suplies
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supplies
by
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with
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 solar wind or water
power
. Thereby,
government
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the government
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 of New
Zeland
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Zealand
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 initiated the program where they promise to provide at least 85% of total energy consumption gained from windmills. In conclusion, we all have to think about which planet we are going to leave for heritors but big companies
has
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far
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a far
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 greater influence on opportunities to keep our
eath
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earth
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 healthy. They must start by reducing
plastic
 wastage and invest more funds in developing
alternatives
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power
 sources.
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