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In the future, nobody will buy printed newaspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#future #nobody #newaspapers #books
In our society,
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 is the most obvious thing for
handful
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 of people. Nowadays, we can easily get success
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shopping online,
registration
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 in hospitals and even hotel check-in.
Therefore
, it is believed, that printed
newspapers
 and books are
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losing
losting
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losing
 their popularity, since all
this
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located
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in
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the
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social networks. Undoubtedly, I admit with
this
 narrative.
First
 of all, in WWN access to the news is free, in comparison with
newspapers
.
For instance
, if one newspaper
is cost
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 approximately 1$, you will
spent
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 about 30$ per only one month, while
in
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social networks you can read it for free.
Moreover
,
newspapers
 are always too large, indeed, it is completely uncomfortable for reading.
Secondly
, with
online-reading
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online reading
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,
person
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 does not have to wait for journalists to print and post it to shops. You need only 1 minute, just take your phone and open special applications.
Thirdly
, real books are expensive. If you adore reading, you will spend more than 200$ per year. Though,
online-books
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 are often free.
Furthermore
, you do not have to bring
heavy
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book
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books
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 everywhere, just open your light phone and read as many times, as you want. In brief, I want to reiterate, that in the future
newspapers
 and real books, for sure, will
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 their relevance, and will be replaced with phones.
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