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In the future, nobody will buy printed newaspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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In our society, the Internet is the most obvious thing for a handful of people. Nowadays, we can easily get success in shopping online, registering in hospitals and even hotel check-in.
Therefore
, it is believed, that printed
newspapers
 and
books
 are losing their popularity
,
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 since all
this
 information is located on social networks. Undoubtedly, I admit with
this
 narrative.
First
 of all, in WWN access to the news is free, in comparison with
newspapers
.
For instance
, if one newspaper costs approximately 1$, you will spend about 30$ per only one month, while on social networks you can read it for free.
Moreover
,
newspapers
 are always too large, indeed, it is completely uncomfortable for reading.
Secondly
, with online reading, a person does not have to wait for journalists to print and post it to shops. You need only 1 minute, just take your phone and open special applications.
Thirdly
, real
books
 are expensive. If you adore reading, you will spend more than 200$ per year. Though, online
books
 are often free.
Furthermore
, you do not have to bring
a heavy
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books
 everywhere, just open your light phone and read as many times, as you want. In brief, I want to reiterate, that in the future
newspapers
 and real
books
, for sure, will lose their relevance, and will be replaced with phones.
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