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Maintaining public libraries is a waste of time since computer technology is now replacing their function. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#libraries #waste #time #computer #technology #function
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There has been unprecedented growth in technology in the
last
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 decade. Some people think that maintaining
libraries
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 is necessary. I strongly believe that computer technology is now replacing their function.
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, with the help of the internet, it is extremely easy to download e-
books
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. The majority of the population prefers reading resources online because it is not only free of cost but
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 there are a variety of invaluable articles.
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, very few individuals befall public information
centers
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 . Maintaining a library exclusively for these users is a thorough waste of
time
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. To illustrate, according to a survey conducted in Austria, seventy-seven per cent of the Austrian population enjoyed skimming through
books
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 that could easily be found via the Google search engine. The local
libraries
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,
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, had to shut down as the
number
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 of citizens visiting the library drastically reduced.
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, unlike in the olden days, human beings appreciate videos and animations. Watching television has been a trend for a very long
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.
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, schools and universities make concepts clear with the aid of visualisations as opposed to the olden days when teachers taught their students with the help of textbook
books
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.
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 the
number
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 of academic candidates and research aspirants who enjoy reading
books
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 from
libraries
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 significantly reduced.
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, these aspirants accounted for a large
number
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 of the population. It is clearly a waste of
time
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 for a person to spend their
time
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 arranging
books
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. To sum up,
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 there are individuals who enjoy going to
libraries
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 to read articles and novels, the
number
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 is too small to maintain a library. More
time
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 should be spent on contributing to the world via technology rather than spending
time
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 on something
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 not very useful to society.
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