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Nowadays, parents are allowing their children to use tablets and smart phones to enhance learning. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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 era, the use of smartphones and tablets
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 increased at a faster pace among children. Currently,
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 are allowed to use these gadgets to improve their studies.
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 essay depicts the advantages of
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 technological growth overweigh the disadvantages. Smartphones with the internet are a great source of information and save a lot of time. It proved that only limited pupils get distracted from their education by using these devices. From the internet, a wide range of data can be accessed within a few clicks using phones.
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 helps the
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 to get the data in minutes for their learning. It improves them to find the different lectures or articles from various channels.
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, it saves a lot of their time from finding out relevant books from the library and other sources.
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, if a student wants to do an assignment on a particular topic, he/she can access and get it completed faster compared to the traditional educational system. But certain
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 get tempted by games and there are chances to get distracted from their learning. A limited number of children might be tended to play online games or watch movies in absence of
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 supervision.
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, some articles related to education can have advertisements that lead them to play games. Without knowing the trap behind it, children can open the link and start playing or watching films. In conclusion, gadgets can be beneficial to improve the learning of
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 by giving them a vast range of information and are less time-consuming compared to the less chance for a few
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 to get distracted by the use of electronic devices.
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