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Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime.other,however,argue that the circumstances of an individual crime,and the motivation for committing it,should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. Disscuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Crime
however
 small or great should always be dealt with a fitting
punishment
.
Criminal
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A criminal
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 in
the
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a
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 fit of rage or sometimes in
self
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self-defence
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defence
 commits the
crime
 but there is always a
motivation
 behind any
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committed
commitment
commited
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committed
crime
. Judging people equally not taking into account the
motivation
 behind the
crime
 helps in
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maintaining
maintain
maintaing
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maintaining
 the
crime
 rate though it proves the point that everyone is equal in the eyes of law
but
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sometimes it's unfair to those who had
not
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no
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 ulterior motives but the
crime
 was just a result of
self
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self-defence
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defence
.
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 if two criminals were charged with murder and
both
 of them are judged equally though one of them
have
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clear
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a clear
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 motive behind the murder
but
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apply
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second
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the second
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murder
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murderer
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 was just in
self
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self-defence
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defence
. though the
punishment
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received
recieved
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received
 by
both
 of them
are
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is
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 similar only
there
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their
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 motives differ which
make
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makes
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 the
punishment
 more severe for one and fitting for the other. Judging
criminal
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criminals
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 based on
there
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their
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motivation
 behind the
crime
 is a great step towards a
fiiting
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fitting
 and just
punishment
. Though it is all right and just
it
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apply
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arises the problem of
increase
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an increase
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 in
crime
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the crime
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 rate . Some
crime
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crimes
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 are just committed in
self
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self-defence
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defence
 but as
there
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their
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motivation
 is
also
 being considered the
punishment
 will not be as harsh as it should be .
Which
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This
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 gives other criminals
strategy
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a strategy
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 to get away
wth
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with
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 the
crime
 they just have to prove themselves to be innocent though the
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system
sysytem
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system
 is great it has
it's
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its
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 own flaws.
Both
 of the
system
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systems
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 are great when passing the judgement but
both
 have
there
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their
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 perks and disadvantages a
micture
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mixture
picture
 of the two will be the best fit
of
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for
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 a system.
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