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Nowadays people are spending more time in workplace and staying away from home for work. Discuss its advantages and disadvantages with your own experiences.

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Work
 is one of the main reasons for human existence. Our job takes us to many places some familiar some new and strange. An organization is a place where tasks are performed and the task is done, it has many names depending on the field you are in. Spending more
time
 in the organization has its fair share of advantages as well as disadvantages . The enterprise increases the potency of the job and the task performed. Workers are surrounded by like-minded people, which in turn helps workers to perform well and give their 100 per cent. The building helps the workers to open up, making them participate in various activities which helps them as it takes their minds off from
work
 and boosts their performance. Spending required
time
 in the workplace results in excellent output but spending more
time
 than necessary has disastrous consequences. The human body is like a machine, it requires its fair share of repairs and some of those repairs come from proper diet and rest. If a worker spends most of their
time
 working from the workplace
then
 there is less available
time
 for the repairs, which in turn results in improper output and affects the
work
. A proper balance between
work
 life and social life is a must and should be maintained as both of them are important and reflect greatly on the
work
. Hard
work
 is necessary but one must know when to sit down and rest and when to
work
. Smart
work
 is more important than hard
work
.
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