In some cultures, children’s are often told they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?

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All cultures in the world are so various. Some of them are democratic, some are strict.

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of education is not the same.

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Japanese and Chinese, children's often told they can

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anything

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in anything

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if they try hard enough. Undoubtedly,

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has more disadvantages, than

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advantages

Firstly

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mental health of

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. If they think, that their future depends only on hard, severe work, they will be always in apathy.

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, they will suffer from depression, stress and other

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is not relevant. In our modern society, each person can be

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successful

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also

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communication skills, networking,

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intelligence

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, and even luck.

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, hard trying is not the main key

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future development.

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, the narrative is not right, for the reason that person's success depends only on believing in yourself and

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. To conclude, I want to reiterate, that there are more

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disadvantages

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giving children

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Motivation
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