write a letter to invite him/her to celebrate traditional festival in your country from overseas. explain your friend about the celebration

Dear Clara, I am so delighted to write

this

letter to invite you to my hometown for celebrating our traditional festival called Onam. Have you remember the photos I have shown your

last

time and you liked

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a lot

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them alot

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alot

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a lot

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Onam is our harvest festival

celebrating

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only in our region in Kerala. It is celebrating for 10 days. We used to put flower carpet with

variety

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of flowers, which looks so stunning. In our place, ladies used to wear set saree during

this

time. I will buy one for you as well. The most exciting part is the games which we are playing. We used to play

tag

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of war between two groups.

Moreover

, we have

famous

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boat racing competition at the location called Asthamudi Kayal.

This

time, we will go and watch. My favourite part is the food which

know

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as 'Sadhya'

where

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has around 20 vegetarian side dishes with dessert. I am sure you will enjoy all these activities

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this

festival and brings you

a wonderful memories

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wonderful memories

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. I am eagerly waiting for you to come and join

with

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us. Best wishes Maria

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
14Grammar mistakes
 

7 paragraphs

184 words

6.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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write a letter to invite him/her to celebrate traditional festival in your country from overseas. explain your friend about the celebration

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

More and more students are choosing to study at colleges and universities in a foreign country. Do the benefits of studying abroad outweigh the drawbacks?

New technologies provided machines which replaced workers to do certain physical jobs and tasks. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific world, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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