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Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

#people #health #sports #facilities #effect #measures
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it
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 believed that public health heavily depends on the availability of
sport
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 facilities for
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. Though detractors say it is rather a narrow view on the problem statement and prefer to consider a variety of other things impacting public
heath
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. In
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 I would like to expand both points of view in more detail. Without any doubt,
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 of sports facilities in some
area
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 would negatively impact its inhabitants.
However
, let us
firstly
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 figure out what is actually meant when someone says “doing sports is good for your
body
”. In my
opinion
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 people mean that
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 lifestyle leads towards obesity, early problems with bones and other human organs, while if you did some exercises at least twice a week it would help your
body
 to serve you for a much longer
time
. Having
this
 in mind let me ask a question - does a person who
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 physically 5 days a week need to go hell and high water in a gym? No, obviously our
body
 requires some
time
 for recovery. So the original statement is rather applicable to white collars who spend most of their
time
 in comfortable chairs in an office. They are the target group who really needs the availability of
sport
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 facilities close to their areas of
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.
Nevertheless
,
besides
 spending quality
time
 in
gym
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the gym
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 it is very important to maintain a healthy diet and at least find a balance with bad habits,
such
 as smoking, drinking
alkohol
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alcohol
, et cetera. Without necessary nutrients our
body
 won`t be able to perform and grow so visiting
gym
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a gym
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 would turn into a negative factor regardless
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 crazy it may seem. By poisoning our
body
 with smoke and alcohol we limit
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the natural
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 capabilities of our lungs and liver
what
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 impacts
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productivity both at work and
in
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 sports premises. Another important factor is mental health,
however
, it
worths
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 I just leave it as
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food for your thoughts.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public health
  • sports facilities
  • physical activity
  • exercise
  • chronic diseases
  • heart disease
  • obesity
  • inclusivity
  • participation
  • safe environment
  • social interaction
  • community engagement
  • comprehensive approach
  • health education programs
  • environmental factors
  • healthcare infrastructure
  • quality healthcare services
  • public health initiatives
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