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The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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Yemen population was divided almost relevant halves between children and adults in the beginning of second millennium: 50.1
percents
 and 46. 3
percents
 appropriate. The fraction of retired
people
 is the less and it occurred 3.6
percents
. In projection for next half of centure the situation would be changed the percentage of children will decline to slight more than a third - 37
percents
. In the same time the proportion of medium age
people
 will increase on a tithe it will achieve 57.3
percents
. The percentage of +60 years age
people
 will marginally grow it will achieve 5.7
percents
. In comparing the demografic situation in Italy is opposite. The vast majority of Italian population occurred over a half - 61,6
percents
 in the 2000
while
 the fraction of adult
people
 occurred less
then
 a quarter - 24.1
percents
. The percentage of child was the least it occurred just 14.3
percents
. Over a fifty-year period the proportions of retired and middle age
people
 will be equal: 42.3 and 46.2 percent appropriate. The child fraction will decline more it will achieve 11.5
percents
.
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