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The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagrams illustrate the comparison between
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Yemen and Italian population ages. The given data shows
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information about the 2000th year and predicts its appearance in the 2050th year. In the 2000th year, the two populations had significantly different age rates. In Italy, there were almost 15
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people
 between 15 and 59 years old. Interestingly, after the passing of 50
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 we will have the opposite result. The charts
also
 give us information about the percentage of young and old
people
 in the two populations. In Yemen, the number of young
people
 will decrease markedly over time,
while
 in the Italian
population
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 it will only slightly decrease. The number of
people
 of the 60+ age will go in the same direction in both populations. But when there is only a small increase in
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Yemen
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 population, in Italy it is almost 18
percent
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