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The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagrams illustrate the comparison between
the
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Yemen and Italian population ages. The given data shows
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information about the 2000th year and predicts its appearance in the 2050th year. In the 2000th year, the two populations had significantly different age rates. In Italy, there were almost 15
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 more
people
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 between 15 and 59 years old. Interestingly, after the passing of 50
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,years
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 we will have the opposite result. The charts
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 give us information about the percentage of young and old
people
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 in the two populations. In Yemen, the number of young
people
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 will decrease markedly over time,
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 in the Italian
population
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 it will only slightly decrease. The number of
people
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 of the 60+ age will go in the same direction in both populations. But when there is only a small increase in
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the Yemen
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Yemen
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Yemen's
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 population, in Italy it is almost 18
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • population distribution
  • age group
  • population pyramid
  • projections
  • young population
  • aging population
  • demographic shift
  • increase in elderly population
  • proportion
  • percentage
  • population dynamics
  • top-heavy
  • balanced age distribution
  • healthcare needs
  • pension provision
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