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Influence of human beings on the world's ecosystem is leading to the extinction of species and loss of bio diversity. What are the primary causes of loss of bio-diversity? What solutions can you suggest?

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One of the most serious issues currently the world is facing is the ecological imbalance as the effect of an increase in the human population. One main reason for
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 is the drastic increase in industrialisation and increased human needs and a viable solution for
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 green
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 and recycling of the products.
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 of an increase in the human population and in order to meet their daily needs, more industries are set up to fulfil their needs. Industries rely on wood and water for producing
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resources
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 for people,
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, by doing
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, they need to rely on forests and natural
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. on other hand, the number of people owning cars is drastically increased and
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 resulting in more emissions and pollution.
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 to that, the forest lands are occupied by humans for their survival which results in deforestation and resulting in loss of
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. To overcome
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 situation, a survey has been conducted by the world health organisation and the results show that by consuming the
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 from solar and wind
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 people should be educated to use cars with green
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 helping the earth by maintaining its biodiversity.
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 to that, the government should announce strict laws on forest land occupancy.
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, all the forest land should be declared a national park and the natural
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 and
species
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 must be protected. To conclude, the major issue resulting in the loss of
species
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 and biodiversity is caused by the authority of humans to fulfil their daily needs. These issues can be sorted by the use of renewable
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 and protecting our natural
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 and
species
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help
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 the world protect itself from global warming.

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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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