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Some people think that government should spend money on creating new public buildings such as museum, city halls, rather than renovating the existing ones. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Should authorities renovate old infrastructure or pull old
buildings
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 down and build new venues? Citizens and elected governments sometimes strongly disagree on
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 topic and often authorities do a survey before deciding on construction budgets. Older property
give
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 cities character and can be a huge asset for tourism in an
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. If you walk around ancient cities like Rome, where a lot of old architecture is retained, you wonder how these
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 were constructed and used. Its unique Roman history shapes the whole city and attracts millions of people from all over the world every day.
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, old constructions cost a lot to maintain and are sometimes not as energy-efficient and green as new
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. New
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 can
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 give a space a fresh look and vibe and
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 open up new opportunities
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 as investors and hospitality. Cities like Dubai and Singapore are fairly recent and hypermodern. They attract, just like Rome, a lot of tourists but
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 offer huge investment opportunities for
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entrepreneurs
entrepeneurs
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entrepreneurs
. I feel that it is hard for governments to decide whether taxes should be invested in retaining historical
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 or go to new constructions. Renovating old property enhances the historical character of the
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 and can even be a tourist attraction while new
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 can be more economical,
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energy-efficient
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energy
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and energy
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 efficient and provide new opportunities for the
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. In my
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 a good equilibrium between characteristic venues and innovation is the key for governments to enhance the growth of the
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 and keep its tax-payers happy. I love it when old architecture gets preserved and new
buildings
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 enhance their features.
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